||[Jan. 27th, 2004|06:22 pm]
Story Title: Wish upon a fairytale (Her capitalization, not mine)|
Author name: Katherine4
Fandom: Pirates of the Caribbean
The Setup: Captain Jack Sparrow is a clever, wily, and charming pirate whose only love is his ship, the Black Pearl and the freedom she brings. Will Turner is a stalwart, noble, and heroic blacksmith who loves his childhood friend, Elizabeth Swann, the governor's daughter. Commodore James Norrington is a man obsessed with rules and propriety and as such is often at odds with the other characters, though he is still a good, honest, and noble man. Of course, in this fic, absolutely none of this seems to matter. Norrington is suddenly living on Tortuga, pirate island, and keeping Will, who is a man-whore. Jack falls in love with Will at first sight and Elizabeth is nowhere to be found.
"Looking for someone?” A teasing voice piped up, followed by a slender figure that took Jack’s breath away.
He was exquisite, tendrils of escaped, wavy brown hair framing his face and accentuating his high cheekbones. His eyes were wide and luminous, sparkling with an ethereal light. But his smile was the feature that caused Captain Jack Sparrow’s mouth to gape unbecomingly, to gawk in fascination. It was a stunning smile, filled with so much life and spirit that it made Jack’s jaded heart ache, made him yearn to lean into that smile and taste it for himself.
This has yet to appear in the actual fic but it's from the summary which leads me to believe the author thinks it one of the most intriguing lines:
“This isn’t a fairytale and you can’t save me,” Will whispered, crystals glittering in his eyes." Apparently, this author hardly ever refers to tears as tears but always as diamonds or crystals.
Notes: This is from the Sue I reported today. The author actually has even worse prose in her Lord of the Rings fic reported at lotrsues yesterday (more diamond-tears and much talk of blond hair like the sun), but I couldn't bear to actually look at that again. Anyone with better constitution than I is welcome to it. Also, I reformatted the above sample so that it wouldn't seem as long. In the original version each line of the paragraph was a paragraph unto itself.